School of Blue Burning Fire

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This book is my sequel to Kingdom of Life. It will involve the story of some of the disciples of Isolated Warrior. The first character will be a little girl taken to planet Diamond by Blue Burning Fire where she will meet a mother blue diamond grizzly and her cub and the blue ice bear before becoming a teenager looking for her identity and finally become a martial artist and ultimately a disciple under Isolated Warrior after meeting up with Nerdy Freak.

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Chapter 1: A girl who loves animals.

A little girl was born in the year 2012 to a set of parents who followers in Delivering King. She was born in a loving family. This blonde hair blue eyed girl's name was Ella W/ Quite Cute. All that changed when she was seven and her parents abruptly divorced (they were planning to do so for a few years now). Ella W's mother was given full custody of her and her dad married a Thai woman. Ella W/Quite Cute's dad would visit her from time to time and take her out yet she wished her parents would get back together which was never going to happened. Quite Cute was a bubbly fun loving girl and loud for a Swedish person. She is extremely affectionate to people and animals. Over time, Quite Cute / Ella W was sent to learn Mui Thai under her father's Thai brother in law. This was an avenue where Ella W could vent her frustration by fighting. She became the bed martial artist among the children even knocking out the half Swedish/half Thai cousin Bjorn Daelander / Vain Glorious (son of her father's brother who also married a Thai woman) and his bed friend (both boys were two years younger than she was). Ella W was pretty tall for her age and despite being skinny, her punches pack a lot of power that she was not allowed to compete with girls. Ella W also could easily get along with animals (cats and dogs) and I not afraid of standing close to bears (with the glass protecting her of course). Ella W's mom doted on her and gave her everything she wanted. Besides, she is the last blonde hair blue eyed girl in Sweden and among the last around the globe. This is because many Swedish are either emigrating to other countries or marrying other nationalities. One night, Ella W had a dream.

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Chapter 2: Childhood dream and adventure.

That night while Ella W was asleep, she was taken by Blue Burning Fire to planet Diamond's beautiful north pole. The tundra was full of blue diamonds around its blue soil. It was summer time where the male blue ice bears were competing for the title as the dominant male. A young twenty tonne male blue ice bear defeated his older opponent (which became one with a blue star) and got raptured to Blue Diamond Kingdom. Every old male blue ice bear too old to mate would become a blue star and get raptured to Blue Diamond Kingdom. While Ella W was watching the bears, she was attacked by an indigo bull walrus. The new dominant male blue ice bear came to her rescue and killed the walrus with a single swipe. The blue ice bear approached Ella W who was shock to see such a huge bear who had the strength to kill even a mammoth with the swipe of his paw. Ella W realized she was standing before the strongest land animal and the largest bear in the universe yet for some unknown reason she was not frightened. The blue ice bear allowed Ella W/ Quite Cute to pet his snout. Ella W woke up back in her bed and heard Blue Burning Fire say, "I will always be with you till the end and the power of the blue star from every blue ice bear which got raptured to Blue Diamond Kingdom is yours when you are older if you remain faithful to Me". Blue Burning Fire took the words from Delivering King and gave them to Ella W. "Remember I will always watch over you My child," said Blue Burning Fire.

Ella W remembered her first dream before her parents divorce when she was taken to planet Diamond and encountered a mother blue diamond grizzly with her cub. The cub approached Ella W and allowed her to stroke him. This could be one of the reason why Ella W is not afraid of bears as she had encountered bears on planet Diamond which are much more powerful than any bear on earth. What was surprising is that the blue diamond bears do not people due to their loyalty to the Three Creators.

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The reason for Ella W's lack of fear of polar bears was due to her encounter with a female blue diamond grizzly and a cub (when she was five) and a huge male blue ice bear (when she was 7 years old).

Chapter 3: Teenage life.

Ella W was transferred to boarding school in the capital of Sweden the very next day by her father as her mother feel into a mental depression. Ella W felt lonely but she managed make new friends and take her siberian husky along with her (the Siberian husky stayed at Ella W's fathers house in Stockholm). Ella W wa enrolled into a different Mui Thai academy where she became a champion boxer once again. One day, after Mui Thai class, Ella W and her siberian husky which was left by her father to keep her company at the academy drove away ten boys with knives who were robbing two boys of their money. Ella W (10 at that time) managed to punch down the eight year old gang leader while her siberian husky kept the rest at bay. When Ella W told her dad the incident, her dad (knowing the older members of the gang who are 13 and above will try to take revenge) immediately sent her and her mother and the husky to Chicago, USA hiring the bikey gang to protect them in the meantime. Ella W spent her pre teen years and her teenage life in the USA where her withdrawn mother had found a new boyfriend of Hispanic nationality. Two years later, Ella W's mom gave birth to a baby girl and Ella W had to make decisions on her own during her teenage years. Back in Stockholm, Ella W's dad had two twin daughters with his Thai wife. Ella W remained a champion in Mui Thai boxing for another two years (all the way up to 12). When she reached 13, she met a much smaller girl in size that defeated her in a sparring match (her first defeat even incurred). After losing a fight to a hispanic girl, Ella W retired from Mui Thai boxing and became a cheerleader, found a boyfriend, and eventually became the prom queen during her middle school and senior teenage years. After the prom, Ella W moved out of her mother's house to live with her boyfriend (taking her husky along with her). This was the beginning of her adult hood.

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Chapter 4: Hedonistic lifestyle.

Ella W and her African American boyfriend (who knows how to rap well) broke up a year later which forced her to move in with some of her friends during high school years. Ella W became a wildest party girl and found a job as a salesgirl. Every weekend was fun for her and she felt on top of the world doing crazy things, having many partners (bad boys) as well as rejecting the nice guys who finish last. This lifestyle when on for about five years before she began to break down. During her break down in the mental home, she was approached by a group of neutron star warriors which tried to recruit her to Evil Black Death's covern. Having no option, she agreed and became a part of the covent sign in blood. Ella W was taken by Evil Black Death and the high ranking neutron star warriors to planet Paradise where a green headed vulture, green hybrid bear and a Megalodon which had defected to Evil Black Death was forced to become one with a purple star,neutron star and a black hole respectively. Ella W was given her fame back and she became even more successful in her sales and even became promoted to a National Manager in only one day at the age of 26. However, with all these instant fame and fortune came at a price.


Chapter 5: Descending into darkeness.

Ella W was forced to do a lot of despicable things she would not normally do as an act of loyalty to Evil Black Death. Any disobedience would result some sort of punishement form Evil Black Death's cohorts. Of course Evil Black Death will ensure there is no evidence that these wounds have been inflicted by allowing his cohorts to heal her afterwards. Her life was no longer her own, everything she did was controlled (including the choice of her partners). Ella W/Quite Cute became Evil Quite Cute for a while. She was made to enter the school of Blue Burning Fire and to try recruiting them to Evil Black Death's covern. Many of the weak and unstable in the school of Blue Burning Fire were easily seduced just as Odd was seduced to become Evil Odd.

Chapter 6: The end of the ropes.

One day as Ella W tried to sneak into the school of Blue Burning Fire, she was approached by Erik (an elder in the school) who was Isbjorn Daelander (Isolated Warrior)'s leader (Isolated Warrior who was also her distant relative and the half brother of Bjorn Daelander (Vain Glorious)). Ella W used her neutron star warrior powers the best she could but was overpowered by Erik's blue star power (Erik was a Swedish man who had married an African woman and moved to USA). Ella W unleashed the powers of the black hole sucking the powers of Erik. However, Erik unleashed the power of the blue stars he had absorbed and knocked down Ella. Ella W was at the end of her ropes and she couldn't go back to Evil Black Death's covern as she will be killed for failing. She did not know what to do.

Chapter 7: The way, the truth, and the life.

As Ella begged Erik for mercy. She had a vision of a blue ice bear which knocked out Evil Black Death before becoming one with the last blue star and causing a supernova destroying the whole solar system. Ella remembered her childhood dreams and realized that Erik had been to planet Diamond where he had commanded at least one male blue ice bear which became a blue star and after the bear was raptured, Erik inherited the power of a blue star. Erik also said, " Blue Burning Fire in me is greater than Evil Black Death in the world!" That was when Ella heard the voice of Delivering King say, "Follow Me". Ella W became a follower of Delivering King and the dark powers of Evil Black Death around her were removed. Ella W was discipled and trained and taken under the wing of Erik's wife. Ella W quickly learned the ways of Delivering King and how to live with true freedom. Ella W was 27 when she became a follower of Delivering King.

Chapter 8: Realising her call and purpose.

Three years later, Ella W suddenly inherited powers of a blue star and realised that the power of a blue star from the blue ice bear which killed a pride of smilodons and a walrus during her childhood had been given to her by Blue Burning Fire. She now knew her call and purpose yet she was unable to channel her powers and needed training. Erik's wife thought her how to channel the powers of the blue star and encouraging the blue eyed woman that there is more to come and she will soon revisit planet Diamond again.

Chapter 9: Marriage.

Ella W met a handsome African man whoi was also the disciple of Isbjorn Daelander (Isolated Warrior) as well as a blue star warrior.

Chapter 10: To planet Diamond.

Ella W and her husband was taken by Blue Burning Fire to planet Diamond with Isolated Warrior and the rest of the team. There she observed the training of Isbjorn Daelander and the last blue ice bear becoming the last blue star before knocking out Evil Black Death. Ella W and the other women was taken back home when her husband and other men and animals like Midnight the purple jungle dwelling eagle was taken to planet Jade to aid Isolated Warrior in battle. Ella W became a true warrior princess and was taken with the women to planet Marganite.

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Ella W at 5 years old taken by Blue Burning Fire to planet Diamond where she met a female blue diamond grizzly and her cub.

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Chapters from Book 2

An incel and loser

A nerd

A graduate

Tour to EEA Park

Mad Scientist/MS

The battle royale

Survival

A divorce

Invitation

A new life

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An incel and a loser.

There was a boy named NerdyFreak who did not have the right hair style, the right body shape, nor the courage to participate in physical activities. He was, however, extremely good at doing photoshops on the computer as well as memorizing every mathematical sum and calculation. Despite that no girl would take an interest in him nor invite him for parties except to fill up a spot. Once incel was invited to a dance party by a mean girl but she never showed up and became the laughing stock and embarrassment after that.

Nerd

NerdyFreak got his name from his classmate and peers after that and settled for a life as a nerd all the way till college. erdyFreak had a crush on Yasmine Brown since they were in high school but was too afraid to approach her. During their high school prom, he pluck up the courage to ask her out but she said she already had a date - Johnny Butch Anderson (JBA) but she offered to be his friend and ever since college would take every problem of hers to NerdyFreak and he would listen and listen but never make the move. NerdyFreak was in fact 'Friendzoned'.

A graduate

NerdyFreak had a crush on Yasmine Brown since they were in high school but was too afraid to approach her. During their high school prom, he pluck up the courage to ask her out but she said she already had a date - Johnny Butch Anderson (JBA) but she offered to be his friend and ever since college would take every problem of hers to NerdyFreak and he would listen and listen but never make the move. NerdyFreak was in fact 'Friendzoned'. Why did NerdyFreak join the trip? He would do anything for Yasmine Brown thats why.

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Tour to EEA Park

A tv program started off with a huge american black bear about to fight with a glacier bear. That tv show was being watched by a mad scientist who is actually an AI and also a ranger of the Extinct and Extant Animals Park (originally called Jurassic Park but I have decided to put my own topic). The mad scientist and ranger also believes there need to be a control in human population. Every year, there are tours organised by the AI which is named 'Mad Scientist' or 'MS'. The tour leads them into a battle royale with no return - once you are in, there is no getting out until the battle royale is over (it is ten dayss long). The tour is advertised on TV to everyone based on their likes and dislikes. This year ten college graduates (including an exchange Swedish female student with blonde hair and blue eyes, ten poachers, and ten ex veteran Navy seals - age 40 to 50 were invited). Among the college graduates, a 'bad boy' name Johnny Butch Anderson was making out with his girlfriend Yasmine Brown at the back of the bus. Sitting not far away was a nerd and nice guy who finishes last named 'NerdyFreak'. NerdyFreak had a crush on Yasmine Brown since they were in high school but was too afraid to approach her. During their high school prom, he pluck up the courage to ask her out but she said she already had a date - Johnny Butch Anderson (JBA) but she offered to be his friend and ever since college would take every problem of hers to NerdyFreak and he would listen and listen but never make the move. NerdyFreak was in fact 'Friendzoned'. Why did NerdyFreak join the trip? He would do anything for Yasmine Brown thats why. Sitting beside Nerdy Freak was the Swedish female exchange student. She was the most beautiful woman on the bus to behold but she was really silent. The Swedish blonde girl and Nerdy Freak did not speak to each other but JBA who was a 'bad boy' had his eyes set on her (even while kissing Yasmine). The bus the college students were riding on was named 'Blue Ice Bear' and was painted blue in colour. The bus named 'Blue Ice Bear', however, was made in Stockholm Sweden and consist of the hardest metal in the universe. The bus driver (also the tour guide) drove the bus and entered EE Park. The park look like a real habitat but there were no animals to be found. The bus driver told the college graduates to be patient and to be ready for the animals but to watch out for danger as well. The graduates led by JBA ran out of the bus ahead of the rest including the tour guide/bus diver. In the meantime the poachers were hunting animals.

Mad Scientist/MS

This was the autobot named Ratchet who was sent to earth and his leader Optimus Prime befriended humanity. contrary to the Optimus Prime in Hollywood, these autobots had evil intentions and they enjoyed watching man and animals fight each other in battle royales. Mad Scientist is the crazy autobot scientist who made and organised EEA (Extinct and Extant Animal Park).

The battle royale

The bus named 'Blue Ice Bear', however, was made in Stockholm Sweden and consist of the hardest metal in the universe. The bus driver (also the tour guide) drove the bus and entered EE Park. The park look like a real habitat but there were no animals to be found. The bus driver told the college graduates to be patient and to be ready for the animals but to watch out for danger as well. The graduates led by JBA ran out of the bus ahead of the rest including the tour guide/bus diver. In the meantime the poachers were hunting animals. Poacher 1 and 2 shot a compsognathus from the previous battle royale but was killed by the rest. Poacher 3 shot a 1500 pound genetically modified lion but was killed by the same lion. A white rhino (from the privious battle royale) gored the same lion as well as poacher 4. Poacher 5 was killed by a 5000 lbs genetically modified saltwater croc as he got too close to the pond of water for a drink. Poacher 6, 7 , 8 , 9 , and 10 went into the open fields and saw 50 wild boars and 50 bisons grazing. The poachers smiled at each other and shot at the ungulates and wild boars. The paochers killed ten wild boars and two bisons. As the poachers went back in the forest, the white rhino appeared out of nowhere and charged trampling poacher 6 and running in the forest ahead of them. The white rhino gored one cave bear and a giant short faced bear but as the rest of the poachers when further in the forest, they saw the dead body of the rhino. The rhino was killed by a t rex judging from the bite. The poachers realised too late when poacher 7 was killed. Poacher 8, 9, and 10 ran their seperate ways. A genetically modified king polar bear killed poacher 8 and a genetically modified kodiak killed poacher 9. Poacher 10 ran towards the pound only to find a 30000 spinosaurus eating the salt water crocodile (which had killed a bison and a lion before hand). Poacher 10 was killed by ex navy 1 who revealed himself to be a poacher hunter. As the ex navy veterans continued walking, the were surrounded by eight lions. They did not want to kill animals but had no choice. However, just as they were about to draw their weapons, a king polar bear appeared from behind and drag away a lion. A genetically modified killed a lion which ran towards it as the pride was dispersed. The same t rex killed another lion. A cave bear killed a lion as well. Two lions killed a cave bear and another two killed a giant short faced bear. The last four lions killed a bison and wild boar but were displaced by a genetically modified kodiak bear. The scattering made way for the t rex, the spinosaurus, and the two genetically modified king polar bears to kill the remaining lions. The 35 velociraptors killed the remaining compsognathus in the meantime. The others were killed by the croc (before it was killed by the spinosaurus), king polar bears, kodiak bears, and the giant short faced bears. The ex navy seals made good their escape and saw the dead body of the tour guide (killed by velociraptors). They decided to warn the college graduates who had strayed too far from the bus and are about to enjoy a party at the other end of the park.
That night, the college graduates got drunk on alcohol and the normally quite swedish girl came out of her shell. She made out with JBA who hit on her. A very hurt Yasmine went to confide in NerdyFreak but instead of being the usual nice guy, a tipsy NerdyFreak had a one night stand with Yasmine and dumped her saying he is tired of being her substitute to lean on. A very hurt Yasmine ran into the forest sobbing and was killed by velociraptors. JBA came out of the tent and went into the forest but was killed by a king polar bear. The still tipsy NerdyFreak when into the same tent as the swedish girl who was still drunk and they made out and had a one night stand and fell asleep in the tent but not before she introduced herself to him as Charlotta 'Sapphire' Olsson. NerdyFreak had his first girlfriend the same night the other graduates were killed by animals. The next day NerdyFreak woke up and Charlotta smiled at him knowingly. The dressed up and wanted to head back to the bus but were surrounded by Velociraptors. Charlotta cried in panic and they heard shooting from outside. The ex navy seals shot at the velociraptor pack allowing the young couple to run towards them. The group of navy seals and the young couple were chased by the velociraptor pack. The velociraptor pack were kept at bay because of the guns. Just as they reached 20 metres from the bus, the navy seals discovered they were out of bullets. Ex navy seal 1 gave the young couple the keys which he got from the dead tour guide and send them to the bus while they bought time for them (each took out the daggers as their last means of defense). The young couple made it inside the 'Blue Ice Bear' and the navy seals stabbed as many velociraptors as the could before they were finally overrun. Even velociraptors were killed before that. The rest of the velociraptors sniffed at the bus but one of them was attacked by a t rex. The rest of the velociraptors ran away and the spinosaurus arrived. A fight between the 30000 pound spinosaurus and the 15400 tonne t rex occured. The fight was vicious and despite the face the t rex had more powerful jaws, the spinosaurus used its superior size to overpower the t rex (Jurassic Park 3 was played right before the young couple's eyes except the trex fled). The spinosaurus tried to attack the bus. However, NerdyFreak who had never drove the bus before decided to give it a try. He pressed a strange button and the bus turned into a 44000 pound 'blue ice bear' robot. The spinosaurus fought with the robot but NerdyFreak being an intelligent guy pressed the button 'grapple' and the robot out grappled the spinosaurus and dominated. The spinosaurus managed to escape, however. In the meantime, there was a massive fight between the giant short faced bears, king polar bears, and kodiaks. The kodiak bears and king polar bears killed some of the giant short faced bears and usurp the wild boar and bison carcasses respectively. The other king polar bear killed a bison and a wild boar in the meantime. The rest of the short faced bears were killed by the spinosaurus and the the gentically modified king polar bears and kodiaks killed the some of the cave bears. The ten woolly mammoths ran amok in panic and killed the remaining cave bears. The last two cave bears killed some of the velociraptors before they were overpowered and killed. The spinosaurus attacked a mammoth which gored it to death. The king polar bear and the kodiak bears in the meantime continued to kill the wild two wild boars and two bisons respectively. The t rex also continued to kill the remaining bisons. Four days later, the remaining ten velociraptors took down two bisons. The king polar bears displaced the velociraptors and fought with each other ending in the death of two king polar bears and one kodiak bear. The surviving t rex and the last kodiak bear killed the remaining velociraptors. The same t rex attacked and killed the final kodiak bear which refused to back down. The last t rex attacked a mammoth and bit out a chunk of flesh but was knock down, gored and trampled to death by the other mammoths.
Survival

Survivors: Nine mammoths, 20 bisons, 30 wild boars, Nerdy Freak and his new girlfriend Charlotte were released after ten days and made news. The bus (which had plenty of food inside) was given to him. Shortly, NerdyFreak got married to Charlotte (the last blue eyed girl in Sweden) and had a boy and a girl. Nerdy Freak found the book 'Blue Diamond Kingdom' in the bus and realized there were other animals out in space and the real blue ice bear (which serves the Three Creators in Blue Diamond Kingdom) on planet Diamond is the strongest animal in the universe. Little did he know he will be Isbjorn Daelander's disciple one day. Scene ends, with MA sending his subordinates (also AIs) to the north pole. Ten thousand male king polar bears weighing 6000 pounds were released into the north pole and killing the males polar bears and breeding with the female polar bears as well as the female king polar bears. The polar bear went extinct in ten years time and were replaced by the king polar bears meaning no more polar bears on the battle Royale. The average king polar bear/polar bear hybrid is greyish yellow rather than white or yellowish white and weighs 3000 pounds on average for males and 1500 pounds on average for females. Charlotte divorced NerdyFreak one years after their daughter was born leaving him to look after their two hispanic/swedish half breed green eyed children.

A divorce

The scene opens with the dead bodies of male polar bears on the ground. Upon, inspection, these marks on the bodies of the polar bears' bodies were left by an even larger bear. Further down the trail of blood, male genetically modified king polar bears were mating with the female polar bears as well as the females of their own kind. One male polar bear mated with a female king polar bear but was killed by a male king polar bear as soon as he finished. This is the same (and last) male polar bear killing a male american scmitar and displaced the rest of the pride before mating with the female king polar bear. Ten years, later in 2040, NerdyFreak, left his son and daughter with his ex with before enlisting himself as a tour guide in 'Blue Ice Bear' with the cost of $100 per person. The ten people that enlisted to go on the trip are ten ex vietnam war veterans who wanted to hunt poachers. Ever since NerdyFreak's ex blonde hair blue eyed Swedish wife left him, he never dated as he was still considered the 'Nice Guy Who Finishes Last' and he never trusted women again. However, he made money because of his skills in high technological staff. The others which joined are ten poachers once again. The animals consist of the survivors for the past ten years:

Nine mammoths, 20 bisons, 30 wildboars (which survived in 2030).
Ten woolly rhinos (which survived in 2031 after killing the last giant short faced bear and cave hyena).
Ten female cave hyenas (which survived in 2032 after killing a chimpanzee)
Ten 6000 pound genetically modified kodiak bears (which survived in 2033 which killed the last remaining polar bears which killed smilodons, american lions, and cave lions before hand)
Twenty 500 pound american scmitars (which survived by ganging up on the last smilodon populator in an all feline battle royale 2034).

Thiry five 330 pound (Jurassic Park weight) Female velociraptors (which killed the last glacier bear on the battle in 2036).
Ten 2000 pound genetically modified male smilodons (which killed of a giant short faced bear in a sabre toothed cat vs short faced bear battle royale 2037)
Thirty 200 pound female spotted hyenas (which killed off a dire wolf pack in the canine vs hyenaide battle royale 2038)
The 7 tonne t rex (which survived an all theropod battle royale in 2039)
Ten 6000 pound genetically modified male greyish yellow white king polar bears (mix with polar bear genes) - old boars (for 2040 which is this year).

Invitation

The tour began and NerdyFreak now 32 allowed the ex vietnam war veterans out of the bus as they had become poacher hunters. NerdyFreak, however, stayed in the bus and drove around as he wanted to survive and now knows the dangers outside. All ten poachers went to the middle of the arena and shot at the wildboars and bisons were, killing 20 of the pigs and 10 of the bisons. The noise and fresh blood attracted the animals. First to get there are thirty spotted hyenas. A gang out american scmitars and tougarians also arrived and a three way battle occured resulting in the death of ten hyenas and ten scmitars as well as three tougarians. The poachers shot at the scmitars, and hyenas until they ran out of ammo. Another two tougarians, five scmitars, and ten hyenas were killed. The rest of the tougarians turned on the poachers and killed half of them. The rest of the poachers ran into the forest and were killed by the king polar bears, kodiak bears, and ex vietnam war veterans. The vietnam war veterans not wanting to harm any animal or be harmed ran back into the 'Blue Ice Bear' bus just in time. NerdyFreak drove the bus in the middle of the Park as there was no way out till ten days later. The smilodons took the carcasses for themselves after killing the scmitars which were still fighting the hyenas (five more hyenas were killed). The rest of the scmitars were killed by the smilodons. Peace did not last long as the commotion outside caused the woolly rhinos to charge everything in sight killing a bison, and five smilodons. The t rex came into the scene and killed a woolly rhino and caused the smilodon pride to scatter. However, they got scattered which is a bad move. This created an opening for the king polar bears and kodiaks to kill the genetically modified smilodons. One smilodon killed a cave hyena which killed a wild boar before that. A king polar bear killed that same smilodon shortly. The cave hyenas took down the rest of the wild boars while the kodiak bears took down the remaining bisons. Five king polar bears killed seven of the cave hyenas and displaced the rest. The greyish yellow white bears than ate the wild boar carcasses. The other five of them joined the kodiak bears at the bison carcasses and they shared the bisons' meat for a while. However, as time passed, the genetically modified bears got aggressive and fought among themselves leading to the death of five king polar bears and two kodiak bear. Three kodiak bears were severely injured and the t rex killed these bears. The thirty five velociraptors surrounded the king polar bears and wanted the meat for themselves but knew that it is very risky as a lot of pack members will die. The velociraptors spotted one king polar bear which was further away from the rest and pounced on it at once. The other king polar bears and kodiak bears were drawn to the commotion and violent fight escalated. One king polar bear was killed and eaten but many velocirptors died in the process. Still one kodiak was killed as well. The king polar bears and kodiak fought each other again. The commotion drew the attention of the t rex which have little trouble killing the now tired and injured bears. Only one survived. The remaining velociraptors investigated the 'Blue Ice Bear' bus and surrounded it. One even used it claws to scratch at the windows. Essentially, they were drawn to music and to the smell of food inside. The only surviving gentically modified kodiak bear came along and investigated after killing a velociraptor and driving off the rest. The kodiak smelled wild boar meat which was roasted by one of the vietnam war veterans hours ago. The kodiak bear began to get violent and actually hit the glass. This forced NerdyFreak to press a button and transform the bus into robotic bear form. The kodiak bear refused to back down until the robot knocked it down forcing the kodiak bear to retreat. Everybody in the 'robotic bear' felt safe for the meantime. The kodiak bear took out its anger by killing an already dying smilodon and rushing at the herd of grazing woolly rhinos which charged everything in sight, trampling the remaining velociraptors and almost hitting the t rex. One rhino accidentally hit the 20 tonne robotic bear but NerdyFreak pressed the buttons 'grapple' and 'throw' and the robot bear subdued the rhino and threw it down. The t rex came out of nowhere and bit the woolly rhino in the neck and tore out 50 kgs of flesh before eating the rhino carcass. The kodiak bear which was hungry tried to usurp the t rex of its meal but was killed by the theropod. This is the first time a kodiak bear tried to attack a trex and NerdyFreak took a video of it. NerdyFreak kept the robot still as he did not want to trigger an attack from the t rex. Nine mammoths in the meantime had just come out of the forest. Spotting the t rex and the robotic bear, they felt threaten as one of their kind had been killed by a trex ten years ago. The mammoths charged the t rex and gored it to death. One mammoth gored at the robotic bear but the robot controlled by NerdyFreak is strong enough to hold it still and throw it down. The second mammoth attacked the robotic bear from the side and caused a bit of damage but not too much since the robot was made of the hardest metal. NerdyFreak quickly pressed the button 'turn and run' and the robotic bear ran into the river nearby. Since the robotic bear was made it polar bear form, it can swim too. The ten day finally came and NerdyFreak and the ex veitnam war veterans made it home. As NerdyFreak rested, he had a vision of the real blue ice bear which could knocked out a mammoth, rhino, and hippo, and a pride of smilodons, and even Green Light Bearer/Evil Black Death (in smilodon form) put together before becoming the last blue star yet obeyed a blond hair blue eyed man named Isolated Warrior. Suddenly, there was a knock on his door and an invitation to meet up with Isolated Warrior/Isbjornson Daelander to hear a word on 'Blue Diamond Kingdom' - home of the Three Creators. The nine mammoths will be used for the next battle royale.

A new life

NerdyFreak became Isbjorn Daelander's disciple. At one point in time, he felt attracted to Ella W. However, he knew he was called to remain single for the rest of his life and as a result did not pursue a relationship with her. Ella W married an African American while NerdyFreak trained hard under Isbjorn Dealander to prepare himself for the journey to planet Diamond.

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(About Quite Cute's story)

Really nice!

Your character-driven stories are among your best*. Ella's story is my favorite, among with Odd's. The common thread is strong and you start with a problem which you resolve in the end.

This time, my critique is more technical than usual. Your last two chapters can be turned into an epilogue which should be no problem. I'm not sure about the first three. They are clearly important, but readers might be confused by the many time skips. Maybe you could start with chapter three, turn two into a prologue, reveal one as backstory and make everyone in three close to their adulthood (because, let's be real, 8 year old gang leaders are a bit ridiculous).

And while this is not a problem of the story per se, but you should explain how Earth in your stories differs from ours. Ella being the last blonde girl in Sweden is clearly different from the world we know today (and your story starts in 2012).

*Your character-driven stores are the best because your setting doesn't allow epic, large-scale external conflict. Basically, the fact that Evil Black Death is so much weaker than the Three Creators makes any large-scale conflict boring.

[creature386]

Having finished NerdyFreak's story, I have to say that I don't like it as much as Quite Cute's.

Three reasons:

1. Characters should be more than walking stereotypes. You've got the generic nerd, the generic vain high school girl, the generic bad boy and the generic mad scientist (to his defense, at least he's an AI).
Given NerdyFreak's personality, it's a bit unbelievable why Charlotta even got married to him. Just because they had really good accidental sex?

2. The internal and external plot should be more related. You have a plot line about NerdyFreak's desire to get laid and the group being trapped in some Jurassic Park, but there barely seems to be any connection

3. Fight scenes should involve characters we care about. There's no point spending whole chapters on battle royales between characters just introduced to be killed as we can't care about them. You can do that when the battle royale is all there is to the story, but here, the battles just take up unnecessary page space.

One a more positive note, I like the ending. In Hollywood, nerds almost always get the girls they so desperately want in the end. By omitting that stereotype, you made your ending less predictable.

[DonaldCengXiongAzuma]

Thanks for your feedbacks. However, have you dated a Swedish woman before?
They have a mentality Tha is different from USA and Australia, they do not date unless drunk and they usually are in their shell unless drunk - not just a saying but based on personal experience too. However, you are correct that there should be no 8 year old gang leader: That 8-9 year old boy( beaten up by Ella W) is the leader of the ten boys but are connected to a much larger gang with older boys in their teens and young men in their twenties and led by a 40 year old.

[creature386]

It's not about the dating. I can believe that, but it's the marriage I find weird.

[DonaldCengXiongAzuma]

Maybe I should replace NerdyFreak's marriage with just a one night stand but he still had one half Hispanic Half swedish green eyed boy than. My favorite human characters are Isbjorn Daelander/Isolated Warrior and Ella W/Quite Cute. Shall we have a warrior battle Royale which includes Quite Cute?